the seasonal blogs from 2006 to 2009
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morning blusters as
the last brave magnolia
cling to the tree
nice one john
Hi jem,I feel it's more like a renga/renku link, maybe introduce a kireji?morning blustersthe last brave magnolia cling to the treeall my best,AlanWith Words Online Haiku Competition.
Thanks for your feedback Alan, always so helpful. You wouldn't believe how many times that 'as' was in and out!
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nice one
john
Hi jem,
I feel it's more like a renga/renku link, maybe introduce a kireji?
morning blusters
the last brave magnolia
cling to the treeall my best,
Alan
With Words Online Haiku Competition.
Thanks for your feedback Alan, always so helpful. You wouldn't believe how many times that 'as' was in and out!
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