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from Sep'2009 permanent website @ The Four Seasons of Haiku
Forrest
in the spring
is closing ranks
I cannot see through you
no more

5 comments:

David said...

Great theme!

I cannot see through you
(any) more ???

Ashi said...

Hi David thanks for comment, this anymore was actually my first pick, but then the last line would have 3 syllables instead of 2 - I think in the end I will change it.

The Cinqku has following syllables order: 2,3,4,6,2 and it's not allways easy to honour that.

martin said...

April sunset
the crow disappears into the trees

David said...

Ashi you have got to go with a true and straight line of meaning and sense. You've made the right decison go with your first instinct. 'Any'!

Ashi said...

David thanks for the word, I have changed it on my own site, I'll let it be here as a reminder.