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dogwood blossoms
consider the clouds
sky meditation

dogwood blossoms
their pale upturned faces
freshly washed by rain

3 comments:

David said...

okay here goes.

'meditations' tells - you need a word here that shows

how about

dogwood blossoms
consider the clouds
carefully

best wishes

David

Alan Summers said...

I think it could better as a one liner and bring yourself in it e.g.

dogwood blossoms I consider the clouds carefully

diana l. said...

This is what I call teamwork! Thank you both so much.

It's so nice to find out at least one useful concrete reason why no one (prior to now) may have commented on this at all.